Don't see why EDM do this or NYR need too

You guys are going to the next round, can't be making these yet.

So that's a soon-to-be-UFA elite goalie, a 31 year old 1C, a substantial cap dump with 2 years left, an RFA LD, three 1sts and a couple of middling prospects. For an offer for McDavid alone to be even remotely serious it would need to have a centerpiece with more long-term appeal than what you've offered. The fact that your proposal also includes the other pieces only makes it much worse. You somehow even have EDM taking on more cap which would be a non-starter.